Well, regarding the first point of disagreement, I've provided what I think is pretty damning textual evidence against you. To repeat, this:
He's assuming that for the concept of sense data to throw light on the foundations of empirical knowledge, sense data must itself be knowledge
Cannot be right, given that he says this:
Yet it would be hasty to conclude that this alternative [that is, alternative (a), that sensing is not itself knowing] precludes any logical connection between the sensing of sense contents and the possession of non-inferential knowledge. For even if the sensing of sense contents did not logically imply the existence of non-inferential knowledge, the converse might well be true. Thus, the non-inferential knowledge of particular matter of fact might logically imply the existence of sense data (for example, seeing that a certain physical object is red might logically imply sensing a red sense content) even though the sensing of a red sense content were not itself a cognitive fact and did not imply the possession of non-inferential knowledge.
That gets as close to a straight denial of your claim from the text itself as I can think of. He also says this:
He can abandon A, in which case the sensing of sense contents becomes a noncognitive fact -- a noncognitive fact, to be sure which may be a necessary condition, even a logically necessary condition, of non-inferential knowledge, but a fact, nevertheless, which cannot constitute this knowledge.
Now being a logically necessary condition of non-inferential knowledge clearly is a way in which something 'throws light' on the foundations of empirical knowledge. But this is something that he allows of sense data, even if sense data is not itself knowledge.
So your claim that he thinks the only way something can 'throw light' on the foundations of empirical knowledge is for that thing to actually constitute knowledge, is wrong.
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Regarding the second disagreement, you seem to be implying that Sellars is critiquing the sense datum theorist for allowing uncertainty in their empirical foundations, which is just not the point of this first section. The point is rather that sense datum theorists have according to him been confused about whether or not sensing something is an inherently epistemic or cognitive fact.
Furthermore, the two paragraphs in which he talks about 'progressively less precarious' subclasses of sensations are in quotations, followed by these words:
This unfortunate, but familiar, line of thought runs as follows:
This signals that Sellars is taking the viewpoint of the sense datum theorist in order to criticize it, not expressing his own view as you imply above. He then concludes by saying that the sense datum theorist is subject to
confusions, not that he fails to secure some sort of apodicticity in his position. The latter is simply not what this section of the paper is about.